Bonjour je dois écrire une rédaction sur une bêtise que J'ai faites lorsque j'étais petit. J'ai écrit quelques chose et je voudrai que vous le corrigiez et m'

Bonjour je dois écrire une rédaction sur une bêtise que J'ai faites lorsque j'étais petit. J'ai écrit quelques chose et je voudrai que vous le corrigiez et m'aidez à enrichir le vocabulaire et ne plus avoir de repetition. S'il vous plait.

voici mon texte:
When I was a little boy, when I was about 5, I made one of my biggest mistakes. Indeed, when I was little, I was someone very greedy and I adored sweets. My mother was hiding candy and chocolate in a secret place, where I could not find them because she knew that if I found them I would finish all the jar on my own. However, I managed to find the secret place by chewing my mother hiding them. She was hiding all in a cupboard in the kitchen of my house, but there was a problem I could not hang candy because I was too small and they were on the highest shelf. So, I took a chair to reach the top shelf and take the candy. But when I wanted to go down the chair is reversed, so I fell with the candy jar and I hurt my back, more the jar is broken. So there was candy everywhere in the kitchen. My mother came to see me after hearing a noise and helped me up by letting me out. To punish me she forbade me to play PSP for 5 days. Now, I regret it a lot because that day I could have hurt myself very seriously and I worried my parents for nothing. "​